I have a beautiful unique classmate in university whose name Salsabilah Firdausi. She lives in Cakung. I met her when I first came to study at HAMKA University. She is a really cheerful girl because she always smiles wherever she is. If she met everyone in every place, she often asks unimportant things and offers anything she has to other although she doesn't know whom she is talking to. For example, when she is going to eat at a cafe, she will offer everywhere there, the entire unknown people, to eat. I often feel embarrassing if she did it in front of me, but I realized that thing makes her unique and makes me love her just the way she is.
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Topic sentence: I have a beautiful unique classmate in university whose name Salsabilah Firdausi.
Topic: A beautiful unique classmate in university.
Controlling idea : Salsabilah Firdausi.
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4 comments:
@ Ayu
Woww,, I really agree with you.
Bella is a unique girl. I know that when we ate in PTC last Saturday.. Hhehehe.
Ay, I think you should pay attention about your capitalization because sometimes you didn't use a capital letter in your first word in your sentences.
Sure Heflin. Couldn't agree more. Yep all sentences should begin in the capital letter, including the 'proper noun'. Bella? So, it's her nick name..Wheeew em thinking about Twilight at thz moment:-))))
Well, Ay(as Heflin greets u)..this is interesting writing. I can figure out what kinda person she is, and I probably will feel the way u feel when em with her :D. U also analyze the topic and topic sentence. It's good, but why don't u mark the 'concluding sentence' too? Do u think ur paragraph contains that? Please show me which one it is. Finally, it's kind of entertaining writing. Nice.
nice writing ay...
in the word "she will offer everywhere there", i think it should be "she will offer everyone there" ? shouldn't it ?? :D
Hohoho yep, u a definitely correct.
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